Per the screenshot, the 'Current' value of 'Ranked warring wins' is incorrect. I compared against a faction mate who would have also participated and noted that they are also showing 0. Also showing 0 on mobile; not an addon issue. Line graph looks okay, holding at 1 to today.
When doing the interview questions to apply for the Army:
"Okay, i'll have to give you a quick interview if you want to sign up. I will ask three questions, you must answer all of them correctly. If you answer even one question incorrectly, you will fail the interview. Are you ready?"
- "i'll" should have a capital I. - The comma in the middle of "I will ask three questions, you must answer all of them correctly" should be a period or a semicolon.
"Correct! World war 2 officially started in 1939."
"You snort a line of PCP. You start to feel dizzy, so you lay down on the couch.Everything starts to go black around you, the next thing you know, you are talking to trees. You wake up in the hospital, feeling very weak."
Between "couch." and "Everything" a space is missing.
Hi. One of the planned robbery messages has a few grammatical issues.
Mistakes in bold.
[name] and [name] meet their contact from Torn City Investment Banking in a derelict car park. [name] hands over cash for the blueprints, and they head back to the faction hideout. [name] studies the blueprints with [name] in detail, and come up with a plan to rob the bank! The team head to the bank, and wait outside in the faction van for the right moment. [name] waits outside the door, as [name] and [name] charge in to the bank and shout "This is a robbery!" [name] points their shotgun at the teller and tells her to fill a bag with cash. As soon as the bag is filled, they grab it and run out the bank. The team jumpin to the van and make a clean getaway.
Corrections:
and they come
heads
waits
out of the
jumps
into
makes
Line 4 would be improved by "The team heads to the bank, then waits..."
Per the screenshot, the 'Current' value of 'Ranked warring wins' is incorrect. I compared against a faction mate who would have also participated and noted that they are also showing 0. Also showing 0 on mobile; not an addon issue. Line graph looks okay, holding at 1 to today.
When doing the interview questions to apply for the Army:
"Okay, i'll have to give you a quick interview if you want to sign up. I will ask three questions, you must answer all of them correctly. If you answer even one question incorrectly, you will fail the interview. Are you ready?"
- "i'll" should have a capital I. - The comma in the middle of "I will ask three questions, you must answer all of them correctly" should be a period or a semicolon.
"Correct! World war 2 officially started in 1939."
"You snort a line of PCP. You start to feel dizzy, so you lay down on the couch.Everything starts to go black around you, the next thing you know, you are talking to trees. You wake up in the hospital, feeling very weak."
Between "couch." and "Everything" a space is missing.
You cannot say "the team head to the bank." Team is absolutely a singular noun in this instance. To say "head to the bank," one requires a plural noun (e.g., "They"). The same goes for all the other verbs used the same way (wait, jump, make).
My suggestion for line 3 is a necessary disambiguation. As written, the line states that the first name comes up with the plan, but the intent seems to be that both of the names came up with the plan. If the first name was the mastermind, the verb should be 'comes'. If the second name contributed, 'they' clarifies this. The sentence could also be rewritten to be completely unambiguous as: "[name] and [name] study the blueprint in detail, and come up with a plan to rob the bank!"
Hi. One of the planned robbery messages has a few grammatical issues.
Mistakes in bold.
[name] and [name] meet their contact from Torn City Investment Banking in a derelict car park. [name] hands over cash for the blueprints, and they head back to the faction hideout. [name] studies the blueprints with [name] in detail, and come up with a plan to rob the bank! The team head to the bank, and wait outside in the faction van for the right moment. [name] waits outside the door, as [name] and [name] charge in to the bank and shout "This is a robbery!" [name] points their shotgun at the teller and tells her to fill a bag with cash. As soon as the bag is filled, they grab it and run out the bank. The team jumpin to the van and make a clean getaway.
Corrections:
and they come
heads
waits
out of the
jumps
into
makes
Line 4 would be improved by "The team heads to the bank, then waits..."
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